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TAB   "El Menosprecio De La Injuria"  -  18  COMMENTS  -  PAGE 1
El Menosprecio De La Injuria      [GP5]   [92 hits]   [Version: 2]   [Id: 105606]
Artist: Open Competition Feb 2009
File Size: 90.2 KB     Number of Tracks: 10
Submitted by: Kraken  (All tabs)  on 10 Feb 2009 22:22, commenting:
Thanks for listen, sorry my redaction, so so English.
Validated by eowyn on 11 Feb 2009 10:28

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:-o I've like this song a bit more than the average
first a couple of complains:
I'm not much into the 5 bars stuff in the intro
the 1 bar bridge must be out xD
then again it's the 3 bars' sequence at the verses. Now, why? that's because you most be concious that it cuts the cadence, if the cadence would have been completed it would have sound much more consistent. concerning the fact that the final cadence of the pattern is a movement with any strenght at all: and that's ending with a Subdominant falling over the tonic (I-, bVII, IV-, I-, bVII, IV-)
the pattern is perfect and consistent over a minor scale (Tonic, Dominance, Subdominance) but it's not complete as it needs or another tonic sound or another dominant sound before ending the cadence. (You'll see what I mean if you add a 4th chord like Gm/D)
it's strange the way the development makes that the verse actually sound like a chorus.
I was ending with verse 1 when I saw "Bridge" coming, and thought like "noooooooo" but it did came.
at the solo the mood is really good. But the solo must have been good too. It's ok, maybe you still don't got that many experience yet writing solos on guitar pro, perhaps wen you listen to the other competitors you'll know what I mean
the interlude reminded me to a song I once made, it was probably like the first song I wrote in guitar pro :) that brought me back some time.
when I saw "Keyboard solo" it came its time and I was wondering "alright so, when is it gonna start" and like it ended and the solo never really started :-o
jajajaja, no but seriously you could better name that as an intrumental cut maybe, but not a solo.
alright, now the goods it's that riff parts are very good, I mean, they sound really well, and the intro parts sound very good too
I also like the outro 'cause it sounds really really complete with all the tracks that are playing.

I did like this song more than an average in the competition

well, good luck with the scores

Rating: 3.0

Posted by stockle  {{ 15 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 11 Feb 2009 12:18

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Honestly the best part of this song for me is the drum fills you do... that's a good thing in regards to the drumming, but it shows that the song lacks a lot of coherence.

Melodically it sounds pretty decent, but the rhythmic patterns for your leads are all over the place, the entire thing sounds so busy and disjointed at times with the vocals and the lead lines that it just confuses me.

It seems like the vocals and guitar leads just do not accentuate any beats very well, the pulse of this song is extremely weak, and the entire thing is not excellently mixed, I get a loooooooot of reverb, it sounds noisy to me.

The interlude, although extremely simple, was pleasant to listen to. Probably the first part where I wasn't straining to hear some sort of coherence.

The repeat intro for some reason sounded better than the intro did, I enjoyed that part very much.

Verse 3 is just way too busy again and then my focus gets lost amidst a wall of noise, chords and melodies and harmonies just get lost in the mix and make a jumble, like you painted a very nice landscape, and then proceeded to draw so much trees and houses and people everywhere that it becomes cluttered, and the beauty is lost.

The keyboard solo is a part which starts off sounding great and all the added melodies end up detracting again, like the vocals.

The outro is a cool way to end, a fadeout but it actually ends in punches, I liked that.

Overall, work on your rhythm, and give each melody a place to breathe! There's too much stuff going on to make it memorable and it comes off unorganized, and unmemorable.

I wish I could give more because this song has potential, but really as it is, it's uninspiring.

2.5 stars.


Posted by JazzDeath  {{ 22 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 11 Feb 2009 18:19

Rated as: Unrated
Well, this song is a bit of a mixed package.

My favorite part by far is the verses, something about the small, frequent lead guitar part I really like, I can't quite put my finger on it. The rest is... average, I guess. You had some good ideas, but they weren't executed in exactly the best way. Like stockle said above, the guitar solo could have been better, but I think you'll get better.

3 stars.


Posted by Quibokk  {{ 16 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 11 Feb 2009 18:36

Rated as: Unrated
Thank you for your recommendations, implement, that I will improve, just take two years studying music, and because I like people like you would to a pautenm errors, to improve every day, thank you again, they are well.

Posted by Kraken  {{ 6 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 12 Feb 2009 12:10

Rated as: Unrated
I like the intro. The pauses with the piano are very nice. Bridge was good and it was an excellent lead in the verse. There are good and bad things about the verses.

First good things. Your vocals were nice. Usually I don't like vocal written through this program but you pulled it off nicely. Drums and bass were also nice. However the verse has negatives aspects to it. The rhythm guitar seemed to through things off. It would have worked out better if you had two strums instead of three before the rest. I also could not here the piano two well during the verses.

Having two verses together made it easy to lose interest. So the solo was welcomed with open arms. It had the right notes but not flow or rhythm if you will. The interlude was okay it seemed sudden but fitting. Verse 3 was nothing new.

Keyboard solo didn't stick out at all it was nice but it seemed more like an accompaniment than a solo.

The outro was nice no real complaints about it. You have a lot of good ideas and sounds with this song but I wouldn't call it finished. You should revisit when you get more writing experience and listen to it and improve on parts you see fitting.
2.5


Posted by daniel9388  {{ 33 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 12 Feb 2009 23:07

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Thanks for the pattern that you have given me, and then follow the same way with this song trying to get better, I will fix it until it is fully complete, all recommendations are occurred to me to fix, thanks again.

Posted by Kraken  {{ 6 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 13 Feb 2009 13:35

Rated as: Unrated
The song lacks rythym i must say, just hitting 8th notes all the time doesn't give it much rythym. For the verses there seem to be too many instruments in it, and the 3 bar rythym just sounds weird. The reintro was nice. For me the verses go for too long. The solo's are okay, the guitar solo had some moments. I just don't feel the song really, it sounds okay but it's not structured well.

2 stars

Posted by Spin  {{ 5 tabs / 1 corrections }}  on: 21 Feb 2009 22:09

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I did not like the intro for the left hand on piano, it just seemed too deep to fit with the right hand. But when the guitars came in I found that the problem had almost vanished. The lead up to Verse 1 I found to be nice and set the mood.

The verses to me just sound a bit too cluttered. Too many things playing their own thing made it a bit difficult to focus on a certain melody. The guitar solo fitted the song well and led into the interlude very well. the repeat intro sounded better with the keyboard playing in the background.

The keyboard solo did sound good, but it seemed a little vague for the song. The outro ends the song nicely and has been constructed well for this song.

3/5*

Posted by apzrman  {{ 7 tabs / 3 corrections }}  on: 22 Feb 2009 05:09

Rated as: Unrated
This song was depressing. I felt this song never really got going and was repetitive. I agree with apzrman that the piano intro was odd; far too much deep bass. It was also too long IMO. The guitar solo was very tame. The interlude slowed the whole thing down on an already slowish song. The "Riff" sections didn't feel like riffs at all. The acoustic track didn't do anything for the song either. There was nothing that stood out.

Posted by blackiel  {{ 0 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 22 Feb 2009 14:53

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Thank you for these recommendations, I will serve in the future to make a good song, I liked his views, I continue its efforts to create melodies and rhythms joint appropriate, take into account their views, but this is my first competition I am happy that you all have given me recommendations for a musician not be easier songs, thank you all.

Posted by Kraken  {{ 6 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 23 Feb 2009 12:47

Rated as: Unrated
I don't like this song. I find it slow and boring with nothing that increases my attention on it.
As in other songs, I would suggest panning the hands that plays the piano.
It deserves 3 stars because of the composition.

3/5

Posted by MNC_Metal  {{ 4 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 24 Feb 2009 02:42

Rated as: Unrated
I think most of the important things about this song have already been said, so I'll just "throw some wood on the fire" (does this expression even exist in English? lol):

- for me the best part of it was the bridge, very heartfelt; piano intro was cool too despite the excessive bass (made it sound kinda creepy, which I think wasn't your intention);
- you didn't pan the instruments! When you have a lot of instruments playing at the same time (as is the case), it's usually a good idea to pan them so the sound doesn't come out all jumbled up... for example you could have panned the piano to one side and the rhythm guitar to the other;
- I think the keyboard in Interlude entered a bit too loud, feels somewhat abrupt;
- guitar solo was alright, even if a bit tame like blackiel said - you could have thrown in some bends and faster sections to spice it up a bit;
- the keyboard solo didn't feel much like a solo... mostly because string ensemble 1 isn't much of a soloing instrument, it works better as a back-up track I think.

Overall, like other people said before, you have all the right ideas when it comes to melody and progressions, however, orchestration and rhythmic figures are points that could use some work.

Rating 2.5 stars.

Posted by |_JR_|  {{ 13 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 24 Feb 2009 15:30

Rated as: Unrated
I have to be honest... I didnt like this song from the beginning. The piano intro it’s bad. I think the piano throughout the whole song is bad, sorry. The song itself its awfuly repetitive, if it wasnt for the “interlude”, it would be the same stuff over and over again. All the parts but the intro use the same chord progression, and that cant be good. Next time try to add different parts, with different rythms.

Rating 2

Posted by Todo Winterwolf  {{ 11 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 27 Feb 2009 17:45

Rated as: Unrated
The piano intro is too random, it would take me like a million years to remember it and play

it. H_armonicaly this song ain't bad, the mood is depressive as hell, but the rythmic

pattern is just the same all the way through and that makes it a little boring to the

listener. I didn't like the bridge, it didn't fit at all with the rest of the song and the

interlude was way too simple compared to the previous part, it was like a sudden stop. Then

everything goes the same.
I feel there's a lack of new stuff, new melodies here, the verse is like all the song,

except for the ramdom intro and the one-bar-bridge.

Rate: 2.0, this song is the same from the begining to the end.

Posted by Daslaf  {{ 22 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 28 Feb 2009 15:44

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Kraken – El Menosprecio De La Injuria

The first thing i thought when listening to the song was that the piano sounded really random rhythmically, like it had no direction. The breaks like the one in bar 11 are really awful, and breaks the flow (no pun intended). You seem to have tried to do repeating parts every 5 and 3 bar, 5 in the intro and 3 in the verses. Maybe the song would have flowed a little better if you removed the breaks and maybe changed the 5 to 4. The 3 actually works pretty fine, but that’s because the chord progression goes in circles. Up until the guitar solo the song is going really slow, and nothing is happening. Uninspired melodies on top of a kind of stale backing. The guitar solo starts out ok, but doesn’t really go anywhere, and again it seems very stale and static. Then the song repeats again, with the same repetitive stuff again, followed by a nice little change of pace with the keyboard solo, even though that one again didn’t seem so good. The melodic ideas are very fragmented, and the solo goes nowhere during its duration.

Throughout the song I’m also thinking to myself that the constant 8th note rhythm has me thinking the song is even more monotonous and repetitive. Maybe with some rhythmic variety the song would come across a little more enjoyable.

Anyway, to end the rant I just want to say you seem to have an ear for making music with a mood, so just keep working at it. Just try to add more variety to the different parts, and make sure the parts flow and connect well. You show promise.

Rating: 1.5

Posted by Beckkill  {{ 11 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 02 Mar 2009 08:59

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