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TAB   "8th Day"  -  10  COMMENTS  -  PAGE 1
8th Day      [GP5]   [235 hits]   [Version: 1]   [Id: 106284]
Artist: Open Competition Oct/Nov 2009
File Size: 60.4 KB     Number of Tracks: 1
Submitted by: 35au1  (All tabs)  on 31 Oct 2009 14:23, commenting:
midi only
Validated by Generis Humani on 02 Nov 2009 12:43

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Well done. This song makes a good instrumental, or movie/video game background music if you will. There's not much to say, not great but my no means bad. Its good for what it is. Look forward to hearing more stuff from you.

Posted by daniel9388  {{ 33 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 03 Nov 2009 13:01

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I complited this song in hurry. There are many things that i don`t like. In last 10 days i was writting some jazzy songs and i wasn`t in mood to finish this song. Well, maybe someday..

Posted by 35au1  {{ 3 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 03 Nov 2009 17:07

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Some ambient stuff, eh? I´m not pretty used to it, but I give my best :)

I like the intro. Pretty chilling mood. I like the effects in track 6. Nothing to complain about this part.

I think the transition into the verse could have been a bit smoother. I doesn´t come out of a sudden, but the connection could be improved.
Verse per se is nice again. Again I like the lead guitar very much. It underlines the atmosphere very well.

Chorus is very cool. The best part till now, though the transition to the next verse lacks work again.

Repeating Verse - Chorus in this short time is not too good. Your hurry in composing gets kinda obvious in these bars.

Your tappings in the 2nd Chorus need some work as well.

Bridges are okay. Nothing special, but not bad either. But you ended this part nicely. Same goes for the next parts.

Soooo, your song starts very solid and it could be much better than it is now. The quality decreases a lot when going forward in your song. Sadly, because there is much potential.

Posted by Donkey of Steel  {{ 8 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 12 Nov 2009 05:20

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Some ambient stuff, eh? I´m not pretty used to it, but I give my best :)

I like the intro. Pretty chilling mood. I like the effects in track 6. Nothing to complain about this part.

I think the transition into the verse could have been a bit smoother. I doesn´t come out of a sudden, but the connection could be improved.
Verse per se is nice again. Again I like the lead guitar very much. It underlines the atmosphere very well.

Chorus is very cool. The best part till now, though the transition to the next verse lacks work again.

Repeating Verse - Chorus in this short time is not too good. Your hurry in composing gets kinda obvious in these bars.

Your tappings in the 2nd Chorus need some work as well.

Bridges are okay. Nothing special, but not bad either. But you ended this part nicely. Same goes for the next parts.

Soooo, your song starts very solid and it could be much better than it is now. The quality decreases a lot when going forward in your song. Sadly, because there is much potential.

Posted by Donkey of Steel  {{ 8 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 12 Nov 2009 05:23

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2,5 stars

Posted by Donkey of Steel  {{ 8 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 12 Nov 2009 05:29

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I agree with most things you said. I was in hurry and many things are just not good. I`m amazed that you found all things that i don`t like about the song. Tapping is interesting, though the ending is playable but not comfortably. The best parts are first verse and chorus, chorus with tapping. Other parts are not so well. Maybe i will finish this song one day.

Posted by 35au1  {{ 3 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 12 Nov 2009 20:11

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I think the idea that you were developing in the intro was nice... but the drum track didn´t help.
I don´t know if it was because I didn´t understand it, but for me, the drums don´t fit. But I like a lot the delayed sampler, it´s one of the highlights of your song. The main guitar keeps the mood, and the solo guitar adds a nice touch. The melodic progression of the chorus sounds really good, But the monotony of the drums (especially the ride) makes the chorus feel "weak". The 2nd Verse and
The 2nd Chorus contribute nothing to the song but continuity, although the measure of transition beetween the chorus and the tap is great. Although in the Chorus + tap and Bridge 2 I hear some notes too dissonant (or out of tune) for me, I liked the Bridge 1. Now, from Reminder to the outro, i really fell lost, didn´t liked the song from there.

So, in summary, I think your song has moments, but are very few, in general it needs hard work. Specially the drum track, I had the same problems writing drums a few years ago, but you can learn a lot getting along withdrummers and writing music with them. I´ll like to hear a new version of the song in the future, if you decide to finish it.

2.5 Stars

Posted by Colochinni  {{ 5 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 15 Nov 2009 10:58

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Drums feets for me, except bridge. This was an idea to create drums with less notes. The rides differs in volume levels and i didn`t wanted to create difficult unplayabe drums due to fact that 7/8 is hard. Dissonant in Bridge 2 was a problem and i tried to make it less hearable. With this dissonant the song is less boring in bridge 2 for me.
The outro has intro feeling and the outro shows my real style (orchestral harp that plays a lot of notes in one bar). Yes, this song needs hard work. I finished it in hurry as i said above. I think that drums will not change much. I had wrote many complicated drums, unplayable etc. and i tried create sth different in this song, makes it more like Portishead style without making drums 'squere'.
I don`t know when i would edit this song, one week before ending the submission i started writing jazz/rock songs.
I complited this sing in one day (Saturday) and had not touch it 2 weeks before. Sad a little.

Posted by 35au1  {{ 3 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 15 Nov 2009 17:38

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Quite interesting song you have here, pretty simple but very melodic, calm and atmospheric. Certainly a good listen.

Starting with the intro, smooth stuff - the vibraphone sampler thingy is really cute. The drums here, and into the verse, are nice but not quite perfect I think, you aim for the really subtle ambient rhythm but it could be better. For example, the "tremolo picked" notes could have used some fade-in dynamics, and I'd have put the bass drum in the 1st beat of every bar, rather than skipping some like you did. This is just nitpicking of course, works well as it is. The drums in the other sections are just fine.

The verse is simple but effective, love the delayed little fills. Transition into the chorus is a bit rough, you could have smoothened it a bit with the drums (some sort of "introduction" to the chorus rhythm). Chorus itself is really nice though, I'm a sucker for 7/8.. xD

The mood builds up nicely into the 2nd verse, cool bass melodies. The tap thing you put in the 2nd chorus is good too, but the G# notes annoy me a bit, because you use it over a Gsus2 chord, making a G-G#-A sequence - very dissonant of course!

The bridges were beautiful. You have a great sense of melody, and it shows here - almost jazzy. Very, very nice. Not much to say about the rest of it, just rearrangement of previous themes. Haha, Rumpy warned us about you and your harp, and it shows up in the very end xD [btw, oddly enough, the G# sounds better here. Maybe it's the non-overdrive.]

One final comment: you said this was somewhat rushed to meet the comp deadline, and there's some little things that could be changed - the aforementioned drum beat in the beginning, introduction of fade-ins and outs for the different tracks (helps a lot on the ambience, and smoothening transitions. Especially the warm pad) - to make this meet its full potential.

It's just slightly rough around the edges as it is.

Rating: 3

Posted by |_JR_|  {{ 13 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 23 Nov 2009 03:18

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8th Day - 35au1

A very pleasant song, but it just sorta drifts by... which is probably what it's meant to do, but it just fails to leave a lasting impression, or at least for me.

I heard a few off notes in the first part of the bridge, but the second part was probably the standout section.

I wasn't a huge fan of the drums in the intro - I just didn't think that they fitted. A complete absence of them throughout the entirety of the intro could help, I reckon.

So, there aren't any major compositional flaws that I made note of, obviously apart from the aforementioned ones.

But I have to say that it's very nice to hear something a bit different - I've had a quick look at your other stuff, and I'm liking the harp. Hope to see you perhaps write something along those lines in future competitions.

3 stars.

Posted by Quibokk  {{ 16 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 25 Nov 2009 04:08

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