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Well done. This song makes a good instrumental, or movie/video game background music if you will. There's not much to say, not great but my no means bad. Its good for what it is. Look forward to hearing more stuff from you.

Posted by daniel9388  {{ 30 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 03 Nov 2009 13:01

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I complited this song in hurry. There are many things that i don`t like. In last 10 days i was writting some jazzy songs and i wasn`t in mood to finish this song. Well, maybe someday..

Posted by 35au1  {{ 2 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 03 Nov 2009 17:07

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Some ambient stuff, eh? I´m not pretty used to it, but I give my best :)

I like the intro. Pretty chilling mood. I like the effects in track 6. Nothing to complain about this part.

I think the transition into the verse could have been a bit smoother. I doesn´t come out of a sudden, but the connection could be improved.
Verse per se is nice again. Again I like the lead guitar very much. It underlines the atmosphere very well.

Chorus is very cool. The best part till now, though the transition to the next verse lacks work again.

Repeating Verse - Chorus in this short time is not too good. Your hurry in composing gets kinda obvious in these bars.

Your tappings in the 2nd Chorus need some work as well.

Bridges are okay. Nothing special, but not bad either. But you ended this part nicely. Same goes for the next parts.

Soooo, your song starts very solid and it could be much better than it is now. The quality decreases a lot when going forward in your song. Sadly, because there is much potential.

Posted by Donkey of Steel  {{ 4 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 12 Nov 2009 05:20

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Some ambient stuff, eh? I´m not pretty used to it, but I give my best :)

I like the intro. Pretty chilling mood. I like the effects in track 6. Nothing to complain about this part.

I think the transition into the verse could have been a bit smoother. I doesn´t come out of a sudden, but the connection could be improved.
Verse per se is nice again. Again I like the lead guitar very much. It underlines the atmosphere very well.

Chorus is very cool. The best part till now, though the transition to the next verse lacks work again.

Repeating Verse - Chorus in this short time is not too good. Your hurry in composing gets kinda obvious in these bars.

Your tappings in the 2nd Chorus need some work as well.

Bridges are okay. Nothing special, but not bad either. But you ended this part nicely. Same goes for the next parts.

Soooo, your song starts very solid and it could be much better than it is now. The quality decreases a lot when going forward in your song. Sadly, because there is much potential.

Posted by Donkey of Steel  {{ 4 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 12 Nov 2009 05:23

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2,5 stars

Posted by Donkey of Steel  {{ 4 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 12 Nov 2009 05:29

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I agree with most things you said. I was in hurry and many things are just not good. I`m amazed that you found all things that i don`t like about the song. Tapping is interesting, though the ending is playable but not comfortably. The best parts are first verse and chorus, chorus with tapping. Other parts are not so well. Maybe i will finish this song one day.

Posted by 35au1  {{ 2 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 12 Nov 2009 20:11

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I think the idea that you were developing in the intro was nice... but the drum track didn´t help.
I don´t know if it was because I didn´t understand it, but for me, the drums don´t fit. But I like a lot the delayed sampler, it´s one of the highlights of your song. The main guitar keeps the mood, and the solo guitar adds a nice touch. The melodic progression of the chorus sounds really good, But the monotony of the drums (especially the ride) makes the chorus feel "weak". The 2nd Verse and
The 2nd Chorus contribute nothing to the song but continuity, although the measure of transition beetween the chorus and the tap is great. Although in the Chorus + tap and Bridge 2 I hear some notes too dissonant (or out of tune) for me, I liked the Bridge 1. Now, from Reminder to the outro, i really fell lost, didn´t liked the song from there.

So, in summary, I think your song has moments, but are very few, in general it needs hard work. Specially the drum track, I had the same problems writing drums a few years ago, but you can learn a lot getting along withdrummers and writing music with them. I´ll like to hear a new version of the song in the future, if you decide to finish it.

2.5 Stars

Posted by Colochinni  {{ 4 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 15 Nov 2009 10:58

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Drums feets for me, except bridge. This was an idea to create drums with less notes. The rides differs in volume levels and i didn`t wanted to create difficult unplayabe drums due to fact that 7/8 is hard. Dissonant in Bridge 2 was a problem and i tried to make it less hearable. With this dissonant the song is less boring in bridge 2 for me.
The outro has intro feeling and the outro shows my real style (orchestral harp that plays a lot of notes in one bar). Yes, this song needs hard work. I finished it in hurry as i said above. I think that drums will not change much. I had wrote many complicated drums, unplayable etc. and i tried create sth different in this song, makes it more like Portishead style without making drums 'squere'.
I don`t know when i would edit this song, one week before ending the submission i started writing jazz/rock songs.
I complited this sing in one day (Saturday) and had not touch it 2 weeks before. Sad a little.

Posted by 35au1  {{ 2 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 15 Nov 2009 17:38

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