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TAB   "8th Day"  -  4  COMMENTS  -  PAGE 1
8th Day      [GP4]   [85 hits]   [Version: 2]   [Id: 106285]
Artist: Open Competition Oct/Nov 2009
File Size: 38.4 KB     Number of Tracks: 1
Submitted by: 35au1  (All tabs)  on 31 Oct 2009 14:24, commenting:
midi only
Validated by Generis Humani on 02 Nov 2009 12:43

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Some ambient stuff, eh? I´m not pretty used to it, but I give my best :)

I like the intro. Pretty chilling mood. I like the effects in track 6. Nothing to complain about this part.

I think the transition into the verse could have been a bit smoother. I doesn´t come out of a sudden, but the connection could be improved.
Verse per se is nice again. Again I like the lead guitar very much. It underlines the atmosphere very well.

Chorus is very cool. The best part till now, though the transition to the next verse lacks work again.

Repeating Verse - Chorus in this short time is not too good. Your hurry in composing gets kinda obvious in these bars.

Your tappings in the 2nd Chorus need some work as well.

Bridges are okay. Nothing special, but not bad either. But you ended this part nicely. Same goes for the next parts.

Soooo, your song starts very solid and it could be much better than it is now. The quality decreases a lot when going forward in your song. Sadly, because there is much potential.


Posted by Donkey of Steel  {{ 8 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 12 Nov 2009 05:24

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Quite interesting song you have here, pretty simple but very melodic, calm and atmospheric. Certainly a good listen.

Starting with the intro, smooth stuff - the vibraphone sampler thingy is really cute. The drums here, and into the verse, are nice but not quite perfect I think, you aim for the really subtle ambient rhythm but it could be better. For example, the "tremolo picked" notes could have used some fade-in dynamics, and I'd have put the bass drum in the 1st beat of every bar, rather than skipping some like you did. This is just nitpicking of course, works well as it is. The drums in the other sections are just fine.

The verse is simple but effective, love the delayed little fills. Transition into the chorus is a bit rough, you could have smoothened it a bit with the drums (some sort of "introduction" to the chorus rhythm). Chorus itself is really nice though, I'm a sucker for 7/8.. xD

The mood builds up nicely into the 2nd verse, cool bass melodies. The tap thing you put in the 2nd chorus is good too, but the G# notes annoy me a bit, because you use it over a Gsus2 chord, making a G-G#-A sequence - very dissonant of course!

The bridges were beautiful. You have a great sense of melody, and it shows here - almost jazzy. Very, very nice. Not much to say about the rest of it, just rearrangement of previous themes. Haha, Rumpy warned us about you and your harp, and it shows up in the very end xD [btw, oddly enough, the G# sounds better here. Maybe it's the non-overdrive.]

One final comment: you said this was somewhat rushed to meet the comp deadline, and there's some little things that could be changed - the aforementioned drum beat in the beginning, introduction of fade-ins and outs for the different tracks (helps a lot on the ambience, and smoothening transitions. Especially the warm pad) - to make this meet its full potential.

It's just slightly rough around the edges as it is.

Rating: 3


Posted by |_JR_|  {{ 13 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 23 Nov 2009 03:19

Rated as: Unrated
8th Day - 35au1

A very pleasant song, but it just sorta drifts by... which is probably what it's meant to do, but it just fails to leave a lasting impression, or at least for me.

I heard a few off notes in the first part of the bridge, but the second part was probably the standout section.

I wasn't a huge fan of the drums in the intro - I just didn't think that they fitted. A complete absence of them throughout the entirety of the intro could help, I reckon.

So, there aren't any major compositional flaws that I made note of, obviously apart from the aforementioned ones.

But I have to say that it's very nice to hear something a bit different - I've had a quick look at your other stuff, and I'm liking the harp. Hope to see you perhaps write something along those lines in future competitions.

3 stars.

Posted by Quibokk  {{ 16 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 25 Nov 2009 04:08

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yer stuff is hard to comment, because it does speak for itself. its strong, sturdy, well thought out, with good flow and content. same here. cant say anything creative, hope you dont mind too much. and indeed, behold the harp :P

3.5

Posted by RumpyTheRubbuhChikin  {{ 30 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 28 Nov 2009 12:13

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